Translation Check by Chrouya
Script: Zombie S2 04[TL and Timing by Aera_Bibi][edited][QCEdit - Fyurie].ass & SIGNS
Workraw: Kore wa Zombie desu ka OF THE DEAD - 04 WR.avi

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*most of these will be mere suggestions, as QC has been applied already*

{SIGNS]

9~10
Whimsical person
*or just Whimsical*

11~12
It's on the house!
*for the TL: tada is slang for "free/on the house"!*

18~63
Embrace me. I'm crazy about you.
*the reason I write embrace here is because of the french sentence in the background*
*Embrasse moi. Je t'aime motherfu--*

139
Haruna's Vision
*Alt. Haruna's View*





{MAIN}

5
I took this moment to enjoy the precious free time.
*He didn't force himself, he just did it (past tense)*

6
Nice, isn't it. 
*just a stupid suggestion because my Japanese teacher says this line all the time.*

7
And it can be assembled this easily.
*how can this be "without any tools", when he used tweezers just some seconds ago*

8
The technology used to make these models nowadays really surprises me.
*There's a "nowadays" in the sentence, and would make more sense if you include that.*

12
Sera...!
*I miss the surprise exclamation*

14
but I didn't expect that you'd be engrossed in such toys at your age.
*qc, choose!*

23
You damn point card insect.
*Someone PM me if we include the damn part*

65 
That place utilizes only girls that are of high level.
*only is lit trans* *high-leveled not possible?*

71
Don't be stupid. I'm going home.
*First sentence is actually "Don't make a fool out of me/Don't make fun of me", but okay.*
*I'm going might also imply him actually going into the restaurant. Not true.*

89
You weakling!
*lit sugg*

165
If you can make them fall in love with you, anything's free.
*this is a good way, maybe. Also, maybe use "on the house" for this and next line*

175
If you fail, I'll make you pay with your body, damn darling.
*This is the correct context.*

190
But I gotta admit those big parts are pretty nice.
*qc it. I'm pretty sure oo paatsu means oo(large, big) parts*

208
The actual hell begins now.
*totally logical I think. Even the Original Translation is fine*

244 
Here drink it! Be grateful.
*a liberal translation fits more like this*

307
*correct TL*

319
but since Taeko will be frightened, you better know when to stop!
*Or I suck at English.*

347
So careless that you blurted out your true feelings?
*sorry, I'm not an editor.*

369
*literally Course but what do I care*

375
I would never give such a lecture.
*Eu is implying she wouldn't be like those imaginary Eu's.*